- Tigerhallam wrote:
- Good, but a couple of grammar errors.
I just finished rewriting it. here is the newer version:
"Do you have them?" The head council man, Atek, asked.
"They are here sir." His assistant, Talil, said.
A small procession of six strollers came into Atek's office. Each stroller held one infant child of the age of one.
"We are here for our duties." Each keeper said in unison. They bowed deeply showing respect and admiration to their esteemed leader.
"I want each of you to lead the six of prophecy from going astray." Atek said. "We need to keep them away from the Johan Tribe. Follow me." He motioned for the keepers to follow him out into the hall. The keepers followed Atek down a huge majestic hall. Made from pure glass and crystal. They then made a right down a narrow and dark passage way.
"The Johan must never know of these children. Not until the children find the prophecy. We must protect our civilization, if the Johan get a hold of these twins they can finally come back. Sadly these six only hold the power to renew one civilization." Atek paused. He stopped at a round metal door. The door seemed to glow as if great heat was being forced upon it. He passed his hand over the small, clear, control crystal. They proceeded through and into a bright and glorious serene landscape.
"As you know, our planet's core is failing. Our atmosphere cant take anymore pressure. The only only way to reactivate our core is to have these marvelous children use there special talents to reawaken it. When they do this our planet will be restored" He finished. They were now walking on a stone path.
In the distance appeared several ships. Each with a different design. Once particular ship stood out. A smaller more elegant ship. It seemed to flow with the landscape looking natural compared to the other more bulky designs around it.
"So these humans, how do they behave." Kanash, The head keeper, asked, curious as to where he would be spending the next portion of his life.
"They act just like us. They have no abilities. The human race is a blind one." Atek said. “They no nothing of spirits. Nor will they for a long time.”
"Then why bring them there?" One of the keepers wondered aloud. She was quite worried on how these humans would act.
"Because there blindness keeps them and us protected." Atek responded. "Humans could see you use your power in front of their face and they wont believe. They are the perfect hiding spot. Their minds a simple enough to allow an easy fix to problems concerning secrecy.”
The group had arrived at the majestic ship. It seemed to meld with the landscape. Covered in detail of their world.
The ship began to lurch violently. The ships around began to disappear one by one. Each heading to some distant world. Atek turned and faced the ship.
"We have no time we must board now. I will have to come with you. I must debrief you for your journey." Atek swiped his hand over an elegant and highly detailed crystal. The wall of the ship began to glow red. The door slowly melted into view showing a lavish interior.
The planet began to crumble around them. The weather was getting worse. The small group began to bored the vessel. One by one they filed in. Each holding a beautiful baby. Once everyone was situated, Atek signaled a command. "Ship activate." Atek said. "Set destination to 9.1.3.5" The ship began to power on. As one by one the floor tiles were alighted.
"Destination accepted loading earth." Said the computer. Everyone aboard took a deep breathe. The ship faded to dust.